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Basketball is my favourite sport because it’s a great way of exercising and also a great way to have fun with friends and potentially make some new ones. I love to watch it on TV, especially the American teams because I think they’re the best basketball players in the world.
In my opinion, I see basketball as a fun and easy way to have fun rather than sitting on the couch all day playing video games or watching television. When you play basketball, you feel much more confident and makes you not care much about how others think about you. That some reasons why I love playing basketball.
Basketball is a great way to get your mind off things and is also a great way to express yourself. It’s a sport that can work your whole body. It’s a great pastime for any one and is a great way to bond with family members and friends. Another thing why I love basketball is because you need only yourself to play the game or, you can play with teammates. I prefer to have others to play with rather than just playing alone.
Basketball is more than just a game, it’s a lifestyle so try it.
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Bonsoir,
Juste quelques suggestions en vert…
Basketball is my favourite sport because it’s a great way
of exercising and also a great way(to exercise, have fun with friends and
potentially(possibly) make some new ones.
I love to watch(I enjoy watching it on TV, especially
the American teams because I think they’re the best basketball players in the world.
In my opinion,
(For my own part, for myself, personally) I see basketball as a fun and easy way to have fun rather than sitting on the couch all day playing video games or watching television.
(redite du début). When you play basketball, you feel much more confident and
makes you not care much (you don't care) about how
(what) others think about
(of) you. That
(il manque un verbe.)(These are some of the reasons) why I love playing basketball.
Basketball is a
great way(redite) to get your mind off things and is also a
great way to express yourself. It’s a sport that can work your whole body. It’s a great pastime for
any one and is a
great way to bond with family members and friends. Another thing why I love basketball is because you
need only yourself to play the game or you can play with teammates. I prefer
to have others to play with rather than just playing alone.
Basketball is more than just a game, it’s a lifestyle, so try it.
bonjour
Cela fait deux fois que j'apporte des corrections au texte et que tout s'en va , je vais donc aller au plus simple
Tout d'abord Laoshi a raison : tu te répètes beaucoup (idées et tournures)
Pour éviter cela , pense à trouver p-e des "défauts" à ton sport , ou alors trouve des exemples de grands joueurs américains ou encore de grandes equipes et leur classement.
Basketball is my favourite sportS because it’s a great way of exercising and also a GOOD OPPORTUNITY to have fun with friends and potentially (possibly) make some new ones. I love to watch WATCHING OU+ (I enjoy watching it on TV, especially THE American teams because I think they’re the best basketball players in the world.
In my opinion, I see(redondant) basketball as a fun and
Basketball HELPS YOU express yourself. It’s a sportS that KEEPS YOUR WHOLE BODY FIT . It’s a great pastime for any one and YOU CAN STRENGTHEN THE bondS with family members and friends. Another REASON why I love basketball is because you ONLY need only yourself to play the game or you can play with teammates. I prefer to have others to play with rather than just playing alone.
Basketball is more than just a game, it’s a lifestyle, so try it.
-après les verbes d'appréciations on met "ing" I love swimming (sauf like qui peut se construire : I like to swim / I like swimming)
-ici on garde le the devant American teams car le "the" spécifie une catégorie: ici il s'agit bien du basket AMERICAIN
-attention au verbe "care" qui a souvent une connotation positive sauf dans l'expression au syle direct "I don't care" que tu ne pouvais pas transposer ici . Donc tu as bien fait de dire "it take things off my mind" et tu exprimes l'idée une fois
Voilà, essaie d'étoffer ton texte .
