Oral d’anglais sur la notion "idée de progrès" - Les robots

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Bonsoir,

Suite au travail effectué pendant l'année scolaire, j'ai décidé de baser ma notion sur les robots. Pourriez-vous corriger les éventuels coquilles restantes ? J'ai en général un niveau correct mais le stress a tendance à avoir raison de ma grammaire x)
Merci !

I'm going to talk about the notion of "Idea of Progress" through the example of robots. Progress is a movement fowards. Then, the idea of progress is the idea that human condition can become increasingly better thanks to various advances in science, technology and social organization. However, the idea of progress is still subject to debate between those consider that it's beneficial and those who think it's harmful. So, should we fear progress ? For answer this question, I will focus on the interview of Kevin Warwick and on the film "I robot".

First of all, History is full of progress and evolution that have allowed the world to be what it is today. Indeed, thanks to breakthrough in science, our conditions of life are better and medecine has become more efficient and accessible. For instance, Kevin Warwick a wheeled professor of cybernetics in "my body, my laboratory" explained how he carried out an experimnent on himself to figure out the interaction between man and machine. The aim was to see if a human being could respond to stimuli generated by a computer thanks to a silico chip in his arm. It was successful because by the implant, Warwick was able to control an electric chair just by his thoughts. So, Kevin Warwick was enhanced with electronics implants. Consequently that article excerpt of the Time underlines that progress in robotics cand find applications in medical field. It could help patients whose nervous system is damaged or disabled people by enhanced prosthesis for instance.

However, there are some reasons to be affraid of progress specially in robotic field. Indeed robots and machines become more and more intelligent. In other word, they could become out of control. For this reason, Isaac Asimov have written the Three Law of Robotics wich prevent robots to harm a human being.This is illustrate with the dystopian american film "I Robot" directed by Alex Proyas where robots have been produced to serve humanity. Althought the only aim of robots it is to improve the quality of life for everyone, it also lead to humanity's downfall. As a result, human being could be subservient to machine. Finally, even if this actually science-fiction, it could become a science fact in the future. Indeed cloning people have become possible nowdays whereas in the past, it was only a dream !

To conclude, progress is essential to the evolution of our world. Moreover that help us having a better life. But, if news technologies have advantages, they have also drawbacks. Finally, it's not scientific knowledge that is either good or evil but the application of it.
bonsoir Siria

je vais te proposer des corrections et des changements que tu pourras voir car je les écrirai en lettres majuscules

The notion:idea of progress: THE ROBOTS


(Bonsoir,

Suite au travail effectué pendant l'année scolaire, j'ai décidé de baser ma notion sur les robots. Pourriez-vous corriger les éventuels coquilles restantes ? J'ai en général un niveau correct mais le stress a tendance à avoir raison de ma grammaire x)
Merci !) ok!!


I'm going to talk about the notion of "Idea of Progress" through the example of robots. Progress is a movement fowards.The idea of progress is ALSO the idea that human condition can become (j'enlève "increasingly qui est redondant) better thanks to various advances in science, technology and INNOVATIVE social organization. However, the idea of progress is still subject to debate between those WHO consider that it's beneficial and those who think it's harmful. THEREFORE WE COULD ASK OURSELVES THE QUESTION : should we fear progress ? IN ORDER TO answer this question, I will focus on the interview of Kevin Warwick (CAN YOU INTRODUCE HIM? HIS NATIONALITY?HIS JOB….)and on the film "I robot".

FirstLY, History is full of progress and evolution that have allowed the world to be what it is today. AS A MATTER OF FACT (indeed est très souvent employé un peu à tort dans les copies), thanks to MAJOR breakthroughs in science, our conditions of life are better and medecine has become more efficient and accessible. For instance, Kevin Warwick a wheeled professor of cybernetics in my body, my laboratory(c'est un livre?:il faut le présenter avec des lettres d'une autre police ou le souligner et dire sa date de parution😜ublished in🙂explained how he carried out an experimnent on himself (je "coupe tes phrases trop longues)HE WANTED to figure out the interaction between man and machine. The aim was to see if a human being could respond to stimuli generated by a computer thanks to a silico chip in his arm. It was successful because by the implant, Warwick was able to control an electric chair just by his thoughts. So, Kevin Warwick was enhanced with electroniC implants (je suis étonnée de voir le mot enhance employé ici mais tu as dû le lire dans l'article) (enhance: the text enhances the idea that : met en evidence)Consequently tHE article excerpt of the Time underlines that progress in robotics cand find applications in THE medical field. It CAN help patients whose nervous system is damaged AND ALSO disabled people by enhanced prosthesis for instance;

However, there are some reasons to be aFraid of progress Especially in THE robotic field. Indeed robots and machines become more and more intelligent. In other wordS, they could GET out of control. For this reason, Isaac Asimov haS written The Three Law of Robotics TO prevent robots FROM harmING human beingS. This is illustrateD IN the dystopian American film "I Robot" directed by Alex Proyas where robots have been produced to serve humanity. AlthougH the only aim of robots it is to improve the quality of life for everyone, THEY also lead to humanity's downfall. As a result, human beingS could be subservient to machineS. Finally, even if this IS actually(attention "actually est un faux ami il veut dire la même chose que really donc pour actuellement tu mettras CURRENTLY (et il y a l'adjectif current=ACTUEL) science-fiction, it could become a fact in the future. Indeed cloning people have become possible nowdays whereas in the past, it was only a PROJECT .

To conclude, progress is essential to the evolution of our world. Moreover IT helpS us TO LEAD a better life. But, if neW technologies have advantages, they also HAVE (attention à la place de l'adverbe ; entre le sujet et le verbe en général) drawbacks. Finally, it's not scientific knowledge that is either good or evil but the WAY WE USE IT ; WE MUST ALSO BE CAREFUL NOT TO REPLACE HUMAN RELATIONSHIPS .

Ok ! Very good English
A ta place je présenterais mes deux sources au début, dans l'introduction.

Dis moi si tu as des questions éventuelles 😉



(ceci est un mot pour le webmestre: merci beaucoup d'avoir organisé deux sujets traitant de la même notion dans deux "blocs" à part)
Bonjour,

Merci pour vos corrections rapides et avisées ! Je vais les appliquer de suite 🙂
J'avoue avoir une petite question sur l'emploi du We. Il me semble que c'est généralement déconseillé car considéré comme pas assez neutre et/ou trop familier par les professeurs. Du coup comment faire pour éviter l'emploi de "We/I" pour la problématique … ? J'ai essayé de le faire mais le fait que vous m'ayez corrigé indique que je me suis trompée dans la construction x) Concernant enhance c'est exact, le terme est donné dans le texte et notre professeur nous l'a donné en vocabulaire dans le sens de "homme augmenté" par exemple.
Enfin, mon professeur m'a dit que cité les sources n'étaient pas une obligation dans l'introduction, du coup j'ai préféré faire "l'impasse" dessus car j'ai peur de me tromper sur les dates …
re-bonsoir Siria

D'abord tu auras tes notes avec toi donc moi je trouve cela plus clair de présenter ses notes avec la date et l'auteur, même de façon brève dés le début.

Il n'y a pas de consigne donnée aux professeurs qui font passer les oraux de bannir ou de favoriser l'emploi du "I" (je le préfère au " we " car tu prends position tu t'impliques dans ton sujet)

Quand on veut dire par exemple "nous savons bien que les Amérindiens sont très attachés à leurs terres" ce "nous " prend la valeur d'un "on" et l'on passera par un passif
Indians are quite attached (et tu vois il est formé comme en français BE (conjugué au bon temps et à la bonne personne suivi soit pour un verbe irréguliers de sa troisième colonne ou pour un verbe régulier de l'ajout d'un "ed" :tu as donc BE+verbe au participe passé comme en français

Ne te fais encore une fois pas trop de souci avec cet oral : tu as de bonnes idées, je finirai de corriger ton autre notion demain et n'oublies pas que le professeur n'est pas là pour te mettre mal à l'aise ,au contraire, alors prends le temps de bien comprendre la question et réponds-y simplement (il n'est pas nécessaire de se lancer dans de longues phrases dont on perd le fil!) 🙂