Oral d’anglais - Espaces et échanges : la globalisation

Bonjour, j'ai mon oral d'anglais dans 5 jours ! malheureusement je m'y suis pris tard et je suis en stresssssssss totale
il y a t'il quelqu'un qui peut corriger ma notion espaces et échanges ?
We're going to talk about spaces and exchanges, a space corresponds to a region of the world, a country like north of america, Australia or London. An exchange is a trade. It can be cultural, financial or economic. So i would like to illustrate this notion throught the theme of the globalization.
So we many wonder if the globalization is a good thing or not?
To begin with, I'm going to explain what is the globalization secondly, I'm going to talk about positive and negative aspects of the globalization.

The globalization is a process of integration and of almost of people, the melting pot of cultures and origins create the globalization

First, The globalization is a good thing because there is a greater chance for people in developing countries to increase their standard of living, there is a greater access to foreign culture in the form of movies, music, food and clothing, thanks to globalization, the man exceeds the naroow frame of the nationalist memberships to become public spirited of the world.
The knwoledge and information becomes accessible to all thanks to the internet and to the means of communication and for finish the good aspects of the globalization the cultures become richer influence the some the others .

Secondly, The globalization is a bad thing because it risks to make lose the cultural wealth appropriate to every region, the individuality of each country begins to disappear due to a certain uniformity culture and there may be a greater chance of disease spreading worldwide.

To conclude, the globalization has aspects positive and negative.

bonjour

Voici ce que je te propose : je corrige en mettant des majuscules:

SPACES AND EXCHANGES

GLOBALIZATION

(Bonjour, j'ai mon oral d'anglais dans 5 jours ! malheureusement je m'y suis pris tard et je suis en stresssssssss totale
il y a t'il quelqu'un qui peut corriger ma notion espaces et échanges ?)OK

j'ai changé pas mal de choses: j'espère que cela te conviendra.

We're going to talk about spaces and exchanges. A space can correspond to a PART of the world, a country like North America, Australia or ENGLAND (London n'est pas un pays). An exchange is a trade. It can be cultural, financial or economic. So I have chosen to illustrate this notion through the theme of globalization.(on ne met pas "the" car on parle de la globalisation en général)
So we may wonder if globalization is a good thing or not?

To begin with, I'm going to explain what globalization IS AND secondly, I'm going to talk about positive and negative aspects of globalization.

Globalization is a process of iN WHICH THE EXCHANGES OF GOODS (des biens)and SERVICES IS CONSTANT AND CREATES A FLOW OF IMPORTS AND EXPORTS FROM A COUNTRY TO ANOTHER .

FirstLY ,I WOULD LIKE TO uNDERLINE THE FACT THAT globalization is a good thing because is OFFERS a greater chance for people in developing countries to increase their standard of living, there is a greater access to foreign culture in the form of movies, music, food and clothing, PEOPLE IN A GIVEN COUNTRY CAN GET THINGS OUTSIDE THE BOARDERS OF THEIR COUNTRY AND ARE CONNECTED TO THE REST OF THE WORLD .

KNOWLEDGE and information become accessible to all thanks to the internet and OTHERS means of communication, THE CELL PHONE AND THE TELEVISION ;ONE PERSON IN A COUNTRY CAN LEARN ABOUT WHAT IS GOING ON IN ANOTHER COUNTRY: HE OR SHE HAS ACCESS TO ANOTHER CULTURE ; THEREFORE, THERE IS MUTUAL ENRICHMENT THROUGH A DIVERSITY OF CULTURES.

IN MY SECOND PART I WOULD LIKE TO ENHANCE THE FACT THAT globalization is a bad thing BECAUSE THERE IS A STRONG PROBABILITY THAT A COUNTRY LOSES ITS CULTURAL RICHNESS AND THAT THE EXCHANGE OF GOODS LEADS TO UNIFORMITY: LET US TAKE THE EXAMPLE OF CLOTHES SHOPS:WE FIND THE SAME BRANDS (marques) EVERYWHERE ;
THIS OF COURSE IS A TREND(une tendance) THAT WE FIND IN THE RICH COUNTRIES ,AS IN THE DEVELOPPING COUNTRIES IN AFRICA OR ASIA FOR EXAMPLE ARE THE ONES WHO DO ALL THE WORK AND WHERE ADULTS BUT SADLY TO SAY ALSO CHILDREN ARE THE THE ONES WHO WORK HOURS IN VERY DANGEROUS CONDITIONS FOR THOSE CLOTHES BRANDS SUCH AS ZARA AND H AND M (attention de bien prononcer le h et le m à l'anglaise)
ON A MEDICAL LEVEL VIRUSES HAVE A QUICKER PROPAGATION AND THIS IS ALSO A VERY NEGATIVE AND DANGEROUS IMPACT ON THE EARTH POPULATION.

To conclude, WE HAVE SEEN THAT GLOBALIZATION HAS GOOD AND BAD SIDES.WHAT IS A REAL PROBLEM IN MY OPINION IS THAT DEPENDING IF YOU LIVE IN A DEVELOPED OR A DEVELOPING COUNTRY, YOU DO NOT HAVE THE SAME STANDARDS OF LIVING; GLOBALIZATION ALLOWS THE GOODS TO BE MORE ACCESSIBLE BUT THE STANDARDS OF LIVING REMAIN (demeurent)
TOO DIFFERENT AND THAT IS UNFAIR (injuste)

ici j'ouvre ta conclusion sur les injustices sociales de cette globalisation; Une bonne conclusion reprend l'ensemble du sujet et ébauche un nouveau thème.

Tu peux me semble -t-il te passer du côté "médical " avec les virus car ce n'est pas le centre de ton sujet. Comme tu le vois,j'ai étoffé tes arguments et ajouté le fait que oui il y a une perte d'identité mais surtout qu'il si beaucoup de produits sont échangeables ,il y a une grande injustice et une partie de l'humanité est asservie à l'autre.
attention, je pense que c'est de l'inattention mais à la fin tu avais mis tes adjectifs APRES ton sujet.(je cite: has aspects positive and negative)

Good luck on your exam 🙂