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During all those presentations I had so much fun discovering each presentation, I loved the exercise and wish we could have more of them during this year. I enjoyed most of them but some other didn’t really catch my attention, for this report I’d like to say that the choice wasn’t easy for me. I saw so much creativity and so much warriors on stage..
I based my comparison on 3 major criteria: hook, slide, and the attitude of the candidates.
I chose three classmate: Clara “FREEZY”, Stephanie “Mnemosyne“ and Amélia with “ easy life the adjustable car”.
Clara’s hook was really soft and interesting, she used the word “imagine”, she invites the audience to create a mental image of what she was describing. -Ever since John Lennon's famous song, it has become a powerful word with emotional appeal- so that was smart, at the same times she tells about her two favorite hobbies in life in few words and a cute slide colorful and full of Happiness, she shows a picture of an amazing place with a lac and nature by telling us that it is the place where she lives, so she tooks only few seconds to grab attention.
Stephani’s hook was a little bit obscure because she starts with a presentation with dark colors and a lot of information,. she didn’t use any illustrations to get across key concepts add to this her choice of a commanding voice and a straight face was too much and I think that ruined her hook. at some point she asks coldly if we have a precious memory to share and to tell about but nobody wants to go on and that was a little bit embarrassing, whilst Amélia was much more spontaneous, she didn’t really had a hook, However, that does not prevent good understanding of her presentation’s subject, in addition she was smiling and that’s why we, listner, form a good impression of her.
Clara’s voice was a little bit shaky, it seems like she hesitate and wasn’t really sure that we likes her product, which was totally wrong, that was really interesting. Stephani spoke fluently without any tic but as mentioned before, a commanding and quite serious voice and I guess it has been done on purpose because her work seems to be based on a very scientific basis, while Amélia spoke loudly enough so everyone in her audience can hear her. I think she was comfortable with her message and that makes it a lot easier to deliver, I think she was really prepared and that help her feel confident enough to stop the shaking voice from creeping up on her.
In conclusion, I hesitate between Clara’s presentation and Amélia’s one. But I clearly loved the fact that Clara was passionate about her Product, even at the end she come up with a “prototype” of her Freezly. Although she was nervous, she was aware of the audience response, she maintained eye contact and managed to keep focus and smiling throughout. Furthermore, she had clear background colour, her product was realistic and the price was reasonable. she use short phrases , pictures and avoids long texts on her slide.
The quality of the information she presented was clear and soft.she provide enough details to support the point of the presentation but not too many unnecessary details. In addition her Vocabulary was easy to understand, and she spoke in clear and fluent manner.Furthermore, she used a good hand and arm gestures and body movement, with no fidgeting.
Amélia’s pace was varied and not too rushed, her pronunciation and articulation were clear and she was in control of subject matter whereas Stephanie didn’t explain unknown words with the result that most of the presentation was unclear.
Moreover, Clara walks from side to side and looks at different parts of the audience, and she was far more efficient in dealing with questions then the two others. and finally her Idea was original and simple, so that is why she is my favorite one.
During all those presentations I had so much fun discovering each presentation, I loved the exercise and wish we could have more of them during this year. I enjoyed most of them but some other didn’t really catch my attention, for this report I’d like to say that the choice wasn’t easy for me. I saw so much creativity and so much warriors on stage..
I based my comparison on 3 major criteria: hook, slide, and the attitude of the candidates.
I chose three classmate: Clara “FREEZY”, Stephanie “Mnemosyne“ and Amélia with “ easy life the adjustable car”.
Clara’s hook was really soft and interesting, she used the word “imagine”, she invites the audience to create a mental image of what she was describing. -Ever since John Lennon's famous song, it has become a powerful word with emotional appeal- so that was smart, at the same times she tells about her two favorite hobbies in life in few words and a cute slide colorful and full of Happiness, she shows a picture of an amazing place with a lac and nature by telling us that it is the place where she lives, so she tooks only few seconds to grab attention.
Stephani’s hook was a little bit obscure because she starts with a presentation with dark colors and a lot of information,. she didn’t use any illustrations to get across key concepts add to this her choice of a commanding voice and a straight face was too much and I think that ruined her hook. at some point she asks coldly if we have a precious memory to share and to tell about but nobody wants to go on and that was a little bit embarrassing, whilst Amélia was much more spontaneous, she didn’t really had a hook, However, that does not prevent good understanding of her presentation’s subject, in addition she was smiling and that’s why we, listner, form a good impression of her.
Clara’s voice was a little bit shaky, it seems like she hesitate and wasn’t really sure that we likes her product, which was totally wrong, that was really interesting. Stephani spoke fluently without any tic but as mentioned before, a commanding and quite serious voice and I guess it has been done on purpose because her work seems to be based on a very scientific basis, while Amélia spoke loudly enough so everyone in her audience can hear her. I think she was comfortable with her message and that makes it a lot easier to deliver, I think she was really prepared and that help her feel confident enough to stop the shaking voice from creeping up on her.
In conclusion, I hesitate between Clara’s presentation and Amélia’s one. But I clearly loved the fact that Clara was passionate about her Product, even at the end she come up with a “prototype” of her Freezly. Although she was nervous, she was aware of the audience response, she maintained eye contact and managed to keep focus and smiling throughout. Furthermore, she had clear background colour, her product was realistic and the price was reasonable. she use short phrases , pictures and avoids long texts on her slide.
The quality of the information she presented was clear and soft.she provide enough details to support the point of the presentation but not too many unnecessary details. In addition her Vocabulary was easy to understand, and she spoke in clear and fluent manner.Furthermore, she used a good hand and arm gestures and body movement, with no fidgeting.
Amélia’s pace was varied and not too rushed, her pronunciation and articulation were clear and she was in control of subject matter whereas Stephanie didn’t explain unknown words with the result that most of the presentation was unclear.
Moreover, Clara walks from side to side and looks at different parts of the audience, and she was far more efficient in dealing with questions then the two others. and finally her Idea was original and simple, so that is why she is my favorite one.