Nelson Mandela, Long Walk to Freedom

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Bonjour, je suis en terminale L et en littérature anglaise nous avions travaillé sur un extrait de "Long walk to freedom" de Nelson Mandela. Le professeur nous a alors demandé de préparer un oral sur cet extrait en l'insérant dans une notion et en ajoutant dans la conclusion un document personnel que nous pouvons également lier à cette notion.
J'ai choisi la notion "Characters and their transformations"

Voici mon travail, je vous invite donc à le lire et à me corriger, ce n'est pas très long étant donné que l'oral ne doit pas excéder les cinq minutes.
Merci pour votre attention!


We studied an extract from Nelson Mandela’s autobiography entitled Long Walk to Freedom, which was published in 1995. In this excerpt, Nelson Mandela relates his life from his childhood to his liberation, which is like a long walk to freedom. Mandela is an emblematic figure; we can put this document in the notion of the characters and their transformations. To what extent can we say that Nelson Mandela has changed during his long walk to freedom? First, Nelson Mandela was born free and then he began to learn that his boyhood freedom was an illusion.

In the first paragraph, the notion of freedom is linked with childhood. The expressions “free to run in the fields”, “swim in the clear stream” (lines 2 and 3) and “ride the broad blacks of slow-moving bulls” (line 4) convey a feeling of happiness and of naivety. When he was a child, Mandela was free because he was naïve and innocent. He wasn’t conscious that Black South Africans weren’t free as the white were.

When he has grow up, he realised how significant freedom was. He realized that Black South Africans were denied speech and deprived of their basic rights so he joined the ANC. Mandela wanted freedom and equality for black South Africans. He wanted to stand up for their rights. He wanted Black South Africans to be considered as fully-fledged citizens.

Thus this document is representative of the notion of the characters and their transformations because when he was a child he was free because he was innocent and naïve but when he became an adult he realized how oppressed Black South Africans were. In The long walk to freedom of Nelson Mandela we learn that if childhood is liked to innocence, adulthood is linked with the loss one one’s illusions. This documents makes me think about the Britannic film “Suffragette”. The story takes places between 1912-1913 in England and is about the fight of feminist activists for the women’s vote’s right. In this film, women don’t only want to can vote, they want to be equal with men and to can have the same rights. So, women fought for the equality with the men and Mandela and also others black South Africans fought for equality with white peoples. But now, Mandela’s fight as women’s fight isn’t ended yet.
corrige de l'exposé "a long walk to freedom

Bravo pour les progrès !!J'espère que mon texte va passer sur ce site car il est en anglais donc je mettrai des remarques pour "couper " un peu le texte !!


We studied an extract from Nelson Mandela’s autobiography entitled "Long Walk to Freedom"(normalement un titre de livre se souligne ), which was published in 1995. In this excerpt, Nelson Mandela relates his life from his childhood to his liberation, which is like a long walk TOWARDS freedom. Mandela is an emblematic figure; we can THEREFORE RELATE this document TO the notion of the (le the est inutile ) " characters and their transformations."
To what extent can we say that Nelson Mandela has changed during his long walk TOWARDS (je sais que ce n'est pas le titre du livre ,donc ,tu peux te permettre de remplacer par "towards" qui insiste sur la difficulté et surtout la durée) freedom? First,(non, il faut te débarrasser de ce tic!! ) when he was born , Nelson Mandela was free(ou at the beginning of his life , Nelson Mandela THOUGHT HE WAS BORN FREE ) and then he began to learn that his(enlever boyhood ,devenu inutile) freedom was an illusion.

In the first paragraph, the notion of freedom is linked to the notionof childhood. The expressions “free to run in the fields”, “swim in the clear stream” (lines 2 and 3) and “ride the broad blacks of slow-moving bulls” (line 4) convey a feeling of happiness and of naivety. When he was a child, Mandela was free because he was naïve and innocent. He wasn’t conscious that Black South Africans weren’t free as the White were.

As a grown_up man , he realised(je préfère le realiZed ,plus moderne) how significant freedom was. He realized(à changer: répétition ; he understood) that Black South Africans were denied speech and deprived of their basic rights so he joined the ANC. Mandela wanted freedom and equality for Black South Africans. He wanted to stand up for their rights. He wanted Black South Africans to be considered as fully-fledged citizens.

Thus this document is representative of the notion of (the) "characters and their transformations" because when he was a child he was free because he was innocent and naïve but when he became an adult he realized how oppressed Black South Africans were. In THE EXTRACT OF The long walk to freedom BY Nelson Mandela we learn that if childhood is liNked to innocence, adulthood is linked TO the loss OF one’s illusions. This documents makes me think about the ENGLISH film “Suffragette”. The story takes places between 1912 AND 1913 in England and is about the fight of feminist activists for the women’s right TO VOTE. In this film, women do NOT (formule d'insistance ,bien appuyer l'intonation sur "not") only want to BE ALLOWED TO vote, they ALSO want to be equal TO men and to BE GIVEN the same rights. So, women fought for equal RIGHTS JUST LIKE Mandela and also other Black South Africans fought for equaliTY (INUTILE DE REPETER CONTRE QUI OU PAR RAPPORT A QUI ,TU L AS DEJA INDIQUE;.) But nowADAYS UNFORTUNATELY ,THESE FIGHTS ARE STILL GOING ON/ WOMEN HAVE GAINED IN MANY COUNTRIES THE RIGHT TO VOTE BUT THEY DO NOT GET EQUAL PAY FOR HE SAME JOB; AND BLACK PEOPLE DO NOT HAVE ACCESS TO THE SAME RIGHTS IN THE FIELD OF EDUCATION THAT IS TOO EXPENSENSIVE FOR INSTANCE. Mandela’s fight LIKE women’s (BIEN PRONONCER WIMIN )fight HAVE NOT ended yet.

je vais t'expliquer pourquoi tu ne peux pas employer can dans Women do not only want to CAN to vote: can ,comme tous les modaux (could, must, may ,will, should, might , ought to (egal de should en anglais) très peu utilisé aux Etats -Unis, would, …

-ne s'utilisent JAMAIS après TO
HE CAN WALK
-NE PRENNENT JAMAIS DE "S" A LA TROISIEME PERSONNE sing.
-NE SONT JAMAIS SUIVIS DE TO

Ils ont en plus un "temps" ex : can est du present could : du passé (je pouvais) ou du conditionnel (je pourrais)

donc il faut leur trouver des remplacants
pour des tournures de phrases ou ils ne peuvent etre acceptables
pour des temps du futur (ex; apres Will)

Pour dire pouvoir: au présent CAN AU PASSE, could au futur, tu as soit ; be allowed to (être autorise à )ou be able to (être capable de )
He will (qui est déjà modal et ne peut pas etre suivi par un deuxieme modal comme can pour dire : il pourra

Si tu veux dire qu'il "pourra" soulever la table : être capable de : he will be able to lift the table

dans ton texte tu avais un 'can" cerné de deux "to" : je l'ai donc remplacé par un équivalent (un "verbe" ou plus exactement une expression verbale equivalente ; to be allowed to qui accepte d'etre entouré de deux "to"

Ok good luck on your speech!

Speak slowly, look at the other people in the room , make cuts : do not hesitate to STOP a while (un temps) after each sentence

🙂
Merci beaucoup madame pour cette superbe correction et pour vos conseils!
You're welcome !!

On commence à se connaître un peu toutes les deux!! 😉
Oui c'est vrai, vous allez devenir ma correctrice attitrée si cela continue ainsi aha 😜