Bonjour, je m'appelle Julie je suis en 1ère et j'aimerais savoir si vous pouviez m'aider à corriger l'introduction de mon exposé en anglais. Voici le texte :
The notion I'm going to deal with is space and exchanges. Nowadays there is a mass tourism, because more and more people have the opportunity to travel abroad. Tourism is based on the fact that people travel for the pleasure in a place wich is foreign to them. Tourists and local populations are both groups wich are in connection with the tourism. Jean Mistler said that 《Tourism consist in sending people who woule be better at their home at people who would be better without them》.
So, how can travel the tourist while respecting the local populations ?
Firstly, we shall see that there are a lot of ways to travel, and then we shall see who is the one that we call "responsible tourist".
Voila, merci d'avance …
Mais ce texte traîne partout sur internet. Enfin, le début du moins.
Il faudrait peut-être élaborer une formulation plus personnelle.
Je ne pense pas que le professeur s'en apperçoive, et puis, ce n'est qu'un exercice d'entrainement … Pour le vrai, je ferai quelque chose de plus personnel comme vous me le conseillez ! 😉
Je m'en suis bien aperçue, moi !
Ah c'est vrai … Je vais y modifier alors … Bonjour, je m'appelle Julie et j'ai besoin d'aide pour mon exposé d'anglais de niveau 1ère S. La grammaire, ce n'est pas mon fort, alors je vous laisse imaginer le nombre de fautes que contient ce texte ^^
Tourism is allows the tourists to discover new places and new populations.
Places which they discover have a big cultural wealth. If they want to preserve the beauty of the places which they visit, tourists mustn't degrade them. For example, they shouldn't damage the old or sacred buildings, the ruins, which are very important monuments for the history or for the inhabitants. When the tourists visit places, or when they walk on paths, they can see panels of instruction but don't pay attention to it. For their safety, or for the safety of the others, or the safety of the site, they should read and follow them. It cost nothing, and it allows to keep the place safe.
Tourism is also based on the respect of natural resources of the site. Tourist and travel agencies thus to respect the botanical and animal species. For example, campers don't have to make a fire into forest when it's forbidden, walkers mustn't pick of protected flowers, and swimmers shouldn't let their waste on the beach. The rather worrisome current cases are first of the progressive destruction of the Great Barrier Reef. And then, there is the disappearance of a lot of animal species. For example, the social networks highlighted recently the case of the death of a baby dolphin killed by tourists who wanted to take photos with him. It's soo sad … So tourists should be more respectful of the nature.
Tourism should also be a positive thing in the social standing, and thus to be respectful with the local populations. Tourists must respect them just as much as the place which they visit. For example, some populations have special faiths, traditions, which tourists have to keep. In class, we saw the example of a sacred place where people bathed for a movie. It offended the inhabitants, and some critics were emitted. We can also notice the fact that some people consider the aboriginals as animals. It is disrespectful, and so stupid !
To conclude, we can say that to protect some countries resources with the tourism, it's necessary to respect the nature, the cultural resources and the local populations. It's a responsible tourism, a sustainable tourism, if we take care of the economic needs of the country.
Voilà, merci d'avance et navrée pour les fautes, j'ai tenté de faire de mon mieux … 😉
