Demande de correction d’un texte en anglais sur l’Inde

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Bonsoir, je vous remercie de prendre du temps pour corriger mon devoir.

Mumbai is a captivating city, a compact variety of the traditional and the present-day. A animated and several place with this waterfront city boasts a vibrant and cosmopolitan identity. At first sight, few cities in the world leave you with such lived impacts, the impressive display of Victorian buildings of the British Raj, the seaside or the labyrinth of streets of Mumbai.
Mumbai is the city that never sleeps and after as the heat of the day would be evaporates, enjoy a different atmosphere in the evening for a scene romantic near the magnificent temple of Walkeshwar, built in homage to the goddess Shiva.
Actually, the superb view of Marine Drive along the Arabian Sea in the Indian Ocean would be perfect for the second scene with the sight of sparkling waters, when the sun sets over the ocean and the city lights begin to flicker all around.
Anyway, the overpopulated scene no will be difficult, owing to bustling city despite a population busy rushing in many directions.
Also one among the biggest parks of Mumbai, Victoria Gardens is a small paradise of greenery and calm and offers rides on an elephant, this is the reason why this will not cause any trouble to shoot a scene with the elephant.
Besides, predict a budget for the hotel and restaurant.
Bonjour! Voici les passages qui me semblent faux à première vue 🙂
Mumbai is a captivating city, a compact variety of the traditional and the present-day. A animated and several place with this waterfront city boasts a vibrant and cosmopolitan identity
- d'abord il faut dire "an" animated…
- a several place ne veut rien dire : several doit être suivi d'un nom au pluriel (several : plusieurs)
- la tournure "a place with this waterfront boasts…" ne me semble pas très anglaise… De plus boast est un synonyme de "posess" pour un objet. L'as-tu employé à bon escient ici? (cf oxford dictionnary :https://www.oxforddictionaries.com/fr/definition/anglais/boast)
At first sight, few cities in the world leave you with such lived impacts, the impressive display of Victorian buildings of the British Raj, the seaside or the labyrinth of streets of Mumbai.
- que veux-tu dire par "lived impact"?
- j'ajouterais LIKE "the impressive …."
Mumbai is the city that never sleeps a
- Mumbai is A city that never sleeps
after as the heat of the day would be evaporates
- que veux-tu dire?
- to be evaporated : to be evaporates ne veut rien dire
enjoy a different atmosphere in the evening for a scene romantic near the magnificent temple of Walkeshwar
- que veux-tu dire? where you can enjoy?
- romantic scene : adjectif avant le nom
overpopulated scene no will be difficult
- je ne comprends pas ce que tu veux dire : que fait le "no" ici?


Voilà 🙂

J'espère que cela t'aura aidée!
Bon courage!