Demande de correction d’une présentation orale en anglais - Le dernier ancêtre commun universel

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Salut,

Je dois faire un exposé sur un thème de biologie en anglais. J'ai écrit la trame de ce que je vais dire, est ce que quelqun peut me dire si il y a des erreurs de vocabulaire, sens, syntaxe, conjugaison etc?
Merci d'avance!

LUCA : The Last Universal Common Ancestor

I'm going to speak about LUCA : the last universal common ancestor. I will follow this framework ; so first I will introduce the topic, then I will answer to the question what is luca, then why is LUCA our common ancestor and finally, I will conclude by giving you the limits of this theorical model

INTRODUCTION

One of the most important outcomes of modern biology has been the demonstration of unity of life
Lamark, a biologist of the 19 century was the first one who proposed a theory of evolution but this is Charles Darwin in the Origin of species who first stated the hypothesis that there was only one progenitor for all life forms and gave a scientific explanation of the diversification of life form that appeared in nature from a common descendent until current biodiversity.
The discovery — nearly 30 years ago by Carl Woese – that present-day life on our planet can be assigned to only three domains:two of prokaryotic nature (Archaea and Bacteria), and one eukaryoyic (Eucarya), has given birth to a new field of investigation aimed at determining the nature of Luca.

I. What IS LUCA ?

This is the acronym for the last universal common ancestor. It was a denomination proposed in 1996 by the biologist Patrick Forterre, searcher at Paris-sud university. All the living beings currently on earth : bacteria, arché, eukaryote belong to the same family. Who says familly says common ancestor. Our common ancestor is luca, this is the last common ancestor of all living beings currently on earth. In other words this is the organism which all living thing descent from. It's important not to confond LUCA which appeared probably 3 billion years ago with the first cell that appeared about 3,4 billion years ago and which engendered lines now extinguished as eliminated by luca's descendants. Thus LUCA don't represent the first life form. Also, Luca is a theorical model it is vain to look for its fossil, and he was not alone, many luca existed in its epoch.

II. WHY IS LUCA OUR COMMON ANCESTOR ?

The presence of common patterns in all life form can be explaned by the fact that they inheritated it though a common ancestor which already possessed it:

Genetic code
Translation apparatus
Use of the same molecule : DNA, RNA, amin acid base

CONCLUSION
LUCA : a theorical model allowing an advancement in the roots of life research…
… but controversal : the possibility of horizontal gene transfert contradicts the reconstruction of LUCA
Bonsoir,
je préfère dire d'avance, que je ne parle pas couramment l'anglais, mais je peux peut-être t'aider pour quelques fautes.
I'm going to speak about LUCA : the last universal common ancestor. I will follow this framework ; so first I will introduce the topic, then I will answer to the question what is luca, then why is LUCA our common ancestor and finally, I will conclude by giving you the limits of this theorical model
Quand tu dis "then I will answer to the question what is luca, then why is LUCA our common ancestor" cela fait trop de then. Je pense qu'il serait mieux que tu mettes un point. Puis que tu reprennes, par exemple avec: to continue… Après ancestor, tu devrais également stopper ta phrase puis mettre: Finally.
Ok merci, je note! 🙂
Quelques remarques en vrac sur le premier paragraphe, étant un peu pris par le temps…

Évitez le point-virgule. Si vous vous sentez obligé(e) d'en utiliser (pour une raison qui m'échappe), ne mettez pas d'espace avant, seulement après.

"So first" est extrêmement lourd à l'écrit. Et écrit ou pas, "First" suffira amplement de toute façon.

En anglais comme en français, une interrogation indirecte ne doit pas subir l'inversion sujet/verbe. Votre phrase "I will answer to the question what is LUCA" donnerait en français : "Je répondrai à la question qu'est-ce que LUCA", ce qui, comme vous pouvez le constater, ne marche pas. Une tournure acceptable serait "I will define LUCA" ou "I will tell you what LUCA is". Il en va de même pour les phrases suivantes qui reprennent des interrogations avec inversions sujet/verbe dans des tournures indirectes.

"Finally, I will conclude" est un pléonasme. "Finally, I will expose the limitations of this theoretical model."

Désolé de m'arrêter là. J'espère que quelqu'un d'autre prendra le relais.
Merci merci!

Je passe le mardi 24 mars, donc si quelqu'un a d'autres remarques à me faire, il reste encore 2 jours! ^^

Sinon mon prof m'a dit qu'il y avait 3 fautes d'anglais sur une de mes diapo mais j'ai beau chercher je ne les vois pas, si quelqu'un les trouve…
Le texte de ma diapo ci après->

WHAT IS LUCA?

- Acronym proposed by P. Forterre in 1996
- Last universal common ancestor of all life form currently on earth
- Lived approximately 3 billon years ago
- Different from the first cell
- A theoretical model
- Not alone in its epoch