Correction d’un texte en anglais sur le développement durable

Bonjour, J'ai un article à réaliser sur le réchauffement climatique pour enfants de 10 ans mais ne suis pas très douée en anglais .
Pourriez vous m'aider s'il vous plait
Accepter de lire ne serait-ce qu'un paragraphe m'aiderait énormément
Merci d'avance

The temperature increase more and more on our planet and it has an impact about many things, like wildlife,sustainable developpement and it could be dangerous for futur generations so everybody should be feel concerned by global warming. But what are the causes ? what will be the consequences ? and what are the potential solutions ?


Causes :

Today, global warming is mainly due by man because we consumme too much and produce more waste. The energy which we use produce greenhouse effect gas and there is lot of pollution and wastes in our atmosphere, like nuclear waste, toxic waste, electronic waste but also polluting industries…. Moroever, the cars are responsible to pollution and produce fumes which are dangerous for the planet. But it's too difficult to give up her car because we'll lose our independance and we couldn't drive over a long distance.



Consequence :

If we don't react, the climate will change. There will be natural catastrophes(tsunamis, floods…)and a lot of species will be endangered.
Global warming is causing the Arctic ice cap to melt, the iceberg is getting small and in 2070 there may be no ice at all. What's more the polar bear lives in the Arctic and are uniquely adapted to survival in this climate, they feed on fish and they hunt from ice but as ice is melting, so they can't survive.

Solutions :

There is only one way to stop the global warming. We must reduce our energy use that emit greenhouse effect, but use energie less harmful for a planet. We can use natural ressource such as water ( with hydraulic dams), sun (with solar panels) and wind (with windmill).
To solve the problem, we must reduce the waste too and we should stop wasting (food,water, evrythings….), we can recycle and sort out the waste.


But you !!! What CAN you do to save a planet ???

1) Switch off the lights when you leave the room
2) Turn down the heating
3) Don't let water run unnecessarily
4) Not wasting paper
5) Riding the bike or walking for a small trip


The man is one of the causes of global warming. The best would be to participate each in sustainable developpment and promot other system, like fair trade and natural ressources.
Everybody should become aware of this catastrophic situation, to act before it is too late.
Everybody must take good resolutions for our planet but no just one day, take resolutions for every day.
ARE WE ABLE TO DO IT ????

Je ne corrige pas le contenu (qui mériterait sûrement quelques révisions également), mais seulement les erreurs de langue et maladresses.

lola255 a écrit :TheTemperatures increase more and more on our planet, and have an impact about on many things, like such as wildlife and sustainable developpement.and it could be dangerousGlobal warming could become a danger for future generations so everybody should be feel concerned by global warming it. But what are the causes is causing global warming?What will be the consequences will it lead to?And what are the potential solutions?


Causes:

Today, global warming is mainly due caused by man human activity, because we consumme too much and produce more a huge amount of waste. Our industries and energy consumption produce greenhouse gases and pollution (nuclear waste, toxic waste, electronic waste) that in turn contaminate the atmosphere… Moreover, the cars are also responsible to for pollution and produce fumes which that are dangerous for the planet. But it's too difficult for us to give up her abandon our cars because we'll would lose our independence and we couldn't wouldn't be able to drive over a long distances.



Consequences:

If we don't react, the climate will change. There will be natural catastrophes (tsunamis, floods…)and a lot of species will be endangered. (N'est-ce pas déjà le cas ?)
Global warming is causing the Arctic ice cap to melt, the icebergsisare getting smaller and in 2070 there may be no ice left at all. What's more theAs a result, species such as the polar bear, who are uniquely adapted to survival in the Arctic climate, will not be able to survive once their environment and primary sources of food are extinguished

Solutions:

There is only one way to stop the global warming. We must reduce our energy use consumption of the resources responsible forthat emit greenhouse effect gases, but and use energies that are less harmful for to aour planet. We can use natural ressources such as water (and, for example, hydraulic dams), the Sun (with solar panels) and wind (with windmills). (Attention, "windmill" peut s'utiliser pour "éoliennes", mais ce mot a également le sens de "moulin". Préférez peut-être "wind turbines")
To solve the problem, we must reduce theminimize waste too, and we should stop wasting (food,water, evrythings….) not only that of food and water, but of everything else too, including resources that can be recycled.we can recycle and sort out the waste.


But you And what about you? What CAN you do to save a the planet???

1) Switch off the lights when you leave the exiting a room
2) Turn down the heating
3) Don't let water run unnecessarily
4) Not Do not waste paper
5) Cycle or walk short distances


The Man is one of the causes of global warming. The best would be for us to participate each in sustainable developpment and promote other systems, like such as fair trade and the use of natural ressources.
Everybody We all should become aware increase our awareness regardingof this catastrophic situation, to and act before it is too late.
We must all reconsider the way we act for the sake of our planet. Not just for one day, but for every day.
CAN WE DO IT????

Je vous remercie énormément. Ceci est très gentil de votre part . Et va beaucoup m'aider