Demande de correction d’un texte en anglais sur le harcèlement

bonsoir,c'est pour savoir si quelqu'un peut corriger mon texte merci d'avance pour votre aide.

Our group chose to make a poster because for we, the message passed on is more direct ,and pass more easily. Indeed, the title and the slogan do past a short message, but the picture do past a message with more impact because she is permanent. Furthermore, a poster attract more the glance than the others carrier. The slogan and the title serve to sensitize persons who feel appalled. In down of the poster, there are statistics which allow denounce of concrete facts which happen in the world. The title and the slogan are written in red, because that makes more visible. The drawing is in middle of the poster because it illustrious perfectly the bullying and he has need to be seen, because he play a role important in the message we have wanted to pass on. The message we have wanted to do past through this poster it's necessary to stop the bullying because he arouse the discontent among the victim. This poster allows also to do to know the bullying at others person and also to do to take consciousness at people that affects more of persons it believe.

Our group chose to make a poster because for us, the message passed on is more direct ,and passes more easily. Indeed, the title and the slogan pass a short message, but the picture pass a message with more impact because it is permanent. Furthermore, a poster attracts more the glance than the others carriers. The slogan and the title serve to sensitize persons who feel appalled. In down of the poster, there are statistics which allow denounce of concrete facts that happen in the world. The title and the slogan are written in red, because that makesthem more visible. The drawing is in middle of the poster because it illustrates perfectly the bullying and it need to be seen, because it playsan important role in the message we wanted to pass on. The message we have wanted to pass through this poster is that it's necessary to stop the bullying because it arouses the discontent among the victims. This poster also allows other persons to know the bullying and also to do to take consciousness at people that affects more of persons it believe.

Voilà, je ne sais pas si j'ai tout corrigé mais j'espère que ça t'aidera 😀 (j'ai souligné la fin du texte parce que je ne l'ai pas comprise…)
Par contre, tu répètes tout le temps pass, il faudrait que tu trouves d'autres mots comme convey ou je sais pas ^^