Bonjour tout le monde,
Je viens de réaliser un exposé en anglais (ci-dessous) et je sollicite votre aide afin de m'aider à corriger les éventuelles fautes que vous constaterez.
Je vous remercie de bien vouloir éclairer ma lanterne !
Bien cordialement
The forensic scientist is called in case of suspicious death. Its mission is to clarify the causes of death.
For his, he practiced various examinations and pratical tests such as the autopsy.
The autopsy we come from a famous physician of the sixteenh century, Ambroise Paré.
The forensic scientist can act with legal requisitions emanating from public prosecutor .
The forensic scientist acts at the request of a judicial authority such as the criminal court, the police court or th civil court. He can make simple observations. It is generally traces of violence, traces who can be physical or psychological. .
When he acts on legal requisitions, he gives his expert opinion on what he finds. According to the article 74 of the Code of criminal procedure, the requisition is compulsory (obligatoire).
He makes autopsies and he gives his conclusions on the probable causes of death in the cases of suspicious deaths. He notices traces particularly serious, and he estimates the possibility of a rape for example.
He examines a victim of agression (victime d’agression).
He practises chemical analysis (analyses chimiques), biological or toxicological.
Any time, the forensic scientist had for mission to enlighten the justice and the citizens about the existence or not of criminal facts.
He makes expertises so that the victim receives compensation.
Si j'ai un conseil, c'est de bien relier tes phrases, par des connecteurs tels que "which", "that" ou des petits mots de liaison comme "so", "despite", "first/then/finally", "however", "nevertheless"…
C'est très simple à rajouter même quand on a déjà rédigé quelque chose comme toi, et ça donne une logique à ton texte, ça enlève l'effet "phrases mises bout à bout" 🙂
Essaie aussi de varier tes verbes au possible
Il y a pas mal d'erreurs, de coquilles ou de termes mal choisis que je mets en gras. Il y a aussi pas mal de problèmes avec les articles, mais je ne les ai pas indiqués pour ne pas compliquer la lecture.
The forensic scientist is called in case of suspicious death. Its mission is to clarify the causes of death.
For his, hepracticed various examinations and pratical tests such as the autopsy.
The autopsy we come from a famous physician of the sixteenh century, Ambroise Paré.
The forensic scientist can act with legal requisitions(je pense que c'est plutôt request ou même order)emanating (inutile) from public prosecutor .
The forensic scientist acts at the request of a judicial authority such as the criminal court, the police court or th civil court. He can make simple observations. It is generally traces of violence, traces who can be physical or psychological. .
When he acts on legal requisitions, he gives his expert opinion on what he finds. According to the article 74 of the Code of criminal procedure, the requisition is compulsory (obligatoire).
He makes autopsies and he gives his conclusions on the probable causes of death in the cases of suspicious deaths. He notices traces particularly serious, and he estimates the possibility of a rape for example.
He examines a victim of agression (victime d’agression).
He practises chemical analysis (analyses chimiques), biological or toxicological.
Any time, the forensic scientist had for mission to enlighten the justice and the citizens about the existence or not of criminal facts.
He makes expertises so that the victim receives compensation.
J'ai essayé de corriger ce que je pouvais. Etant donné que cela fait plusieurs années que je n'ai pas fait d'anglais, il m'est un peu difficile de me "remettre dans le bain".
En tout cas merci pour vos réponse =)
The forensic scientist is called in case of suspicious death. It's mission is to clarify the causes of death.
For his, hepractises various examinations and analysis such as the autopsy.
The autopsy comes from a famous physician of the sixteenh century, Ambroise Paré.
The forensic scientist can act with legal request (c'est bien request, j'ai vérifié ! . In fact the forensic scientist acts at the request of a judicial authority such as the criminal court, the police court or civil court. He can make simple observations. It's generally traces of violence, traces which can be physical or psychological. .
When the coroner acts on legal request, he gives his expert opinion on what he finds. According to the article 74 of the Code of criminal procedure, the requisition is compulsory (obligatoire).
He performs autopsies and he gives his conclusions on the probable causes of death in the cases of suspicious deaths. He notices traces particularly serious, and he estimates the possibility of a rape for example.
He examines a victim of attack (victime d’agression).
He practises chemical analysis (analyses chimiques), biological or toxicological.
The forensic scientist had for mission to enlighten the justice (là j'ai beau chercher je ne trouve pas ! la traduction de enlighten, c'est bien éclairer quelquequ'un sur quelque chose ! and the citizens about the existence or not of criminal facts.
He performs expertises so that the victim receives compensation.
Suite du script :
The coroner practises chemical analysis (analyses chimiques), biological or toxicological. So he takes a blood sample (réalise des prélvements de sang).
marly1101 a écrit :The forensic scientist is called in case of suspicious death. It's mission is to clarify the causes of death.
For his, hepractises various examinations and analysis such as the autopsy.
Je n'ai pas trop le temps aujourd'hui mais juste sur le début:
"Its" ne convenait pas mais "It's" est pire ! Comme ça se rapporte à "scientist", il faut mettre soit "his", soit, plus politiquement correct aujourd'hui, "his or her", soit comme on le dit couramment "their".
"For his" ne veut rien dire. Vous vouliez dire probablement "For this", mais ce serait mieux de dire, par exemple, "to this end".
He or she.
D'accord ! Merci bien ! Je prends bonne note de toutes ces recommandations !
lamaneur a écrit :marly1101 a écrit :The forensic scientist is called in case of suspicious death. It's mission is to clarify the causes of death.
For his, hepractises various examinations and analysis such as the autopsy.
Je n'ai pas trop le temps aujourd'hui mais juste sur le début:
"Its" ne convenait pas mais "It's" est pire ! Comme ça se rapporte à "scientist", il faut mettre soit "his", soit, plus politiquement correct aujourd'hui, "his or her", soit comme on le dit couramment "their".
"For his" ne veut rien dire. Vous vouliez dire probablement "For this", mais ce serait mieux de dire, par exemple, "to this end".
He or she.
Ca date un peu, mais il faut quand même noter qu'en anglais, on ne présente pas un groupe en utilisant le singulier. En français, on dit volontiers "l'éléphant est un mammifère", mais en anglais on dirait "elephants are mammals". Il en va de même ici. Vous auriez dû utiliser le pluriel tout le long du texte.
