Dm d’anglais

coucou , je suis en classe de seconde et je dois faire un dm d'anglais pour lundi ( certes il faut faire 150 mots concernant le meurtre d'unpersonnage ) et j'ai déjà fait le début

mais l'anglais ce n'est pas mon point fort , alors s'il vous plait aidez moi à corriger mes erreurs
merci d'avance

voici mon texte :

This history took place during the night of december 17th , It was cold and the snow had covered all the village
as usual , dc.Ritchter back at home at 21h35

he was responsable for the death of fifty workers in the explosion of one of his armement factories
when he arrived The moon had already announced his presence and streets were deserted without lightings
when he was at home , he was alone went to look by the windows and see tracks of shoes which left an invisible passer-by after every step
he was amazed and panic-stricken

Je suis en première donc il se peut que je laisse passer des fautes… J'ai cependant corrigé ce que j'avais trouvé !

This story take place during the night of december 17th , It was cold and the snow covered all village
as usual , dc.Ritchter came back at home at 9:00 pm.

He was responsable of the death of fifty workers in the explosion of one of his armement factories.
When he arrived The moon had already announced its presence and streets were deserted and darks.
When he was at home , he was alone. He went to the window to look outside and he saw tracks of shoes which left an invisible passer-by after every step
he was amazed and panic-stricken

Voilà, j'espère que ça t'aidera.

lol ( mais je l'ai déja rendu ) mais merciii pour ton aide