bonjours, cette fois j'ai toute les vacances pour faire l'exercice, mais je préfère le faire tot
donc la consigne était de fait un résumé sur un dialogue qu'on a entendu en classe.
il nous corrigeras plus attentivement sur les groupes verbeaux, les temps, les détérminant, le 's de possesion et want
voila mon texte
In this story, ther are two people who are Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is rather averagely aged. The story takes place to Deana's house, in the porth. Deana live in autarky in the wood and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she don't wants to have the news of world. She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went in her house beacause he brought food, post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV and she doesn't listen to the radio. They spook of books, TV, the radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
voila, c'est sur un dialogue du programme de "Prime Tine" collection hachette, série première, si vous avez déja ut
j'éspère qu'il y a pas trop de fautes
charlie53 a écrit :In this story, there are two people [1] who are Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is rather averagely aged. The story takes place to [2] Deana's house, in the porth. Deana live in autarky in the wood and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she don't wants to have the news of world. She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went in her house beacausehe brought food, post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV [*] and she isn't used to listen to the radio. They spook [3] of books, TV, (the) radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
rouge > erreurs non corrigées.
vert > correction apportée.
bleu > Contre-sens / rupture avec la logique de la phrase.
[1] Plus usité de dire "persons", à ce que j'ai lu.
[2] Pas de mouvement, ce n'est pas la direction = at
[3] to speak, spoke, spoken
[*] J'aurais plutôt écrit: "because Deana never has had any TV", mais je n'en suis pas sûr !
A re-vérifier, il manque certainement des erreurs !
Zadek
ok
je comprend pas pourquoi t a mis there
she don't wants donne she doesn't wants?
ok pour because
he brought food, post and a bottle of gaz
je voulais dire qu'il apporte de la nourriture, les lettres, et une bouteille de gaz
Jerry vient chez elle pour apporter ceci
qu'est qui n'est pas bon?
(3) they speak ?
And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
c'est la place de la phrase qui ne va pas?
la femme veut qu'il apporte plus de livre la prochaine fois
merci commème
ok j'ai compris pour there, ces une faute de frappe
In this story , there are two persons , Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is rather middle aged. The story takes place in front of Deana's house. Deana lives in autarky in the bit and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she doesn't wants to have the news of the world. She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went in her house because he brought food, the post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV and she doesn't listen to the radio. They speak of books, TV, the radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
autarky veut bien dire autarcie?
bit veut bien dire foret?
je ne vois pas pour she doesn't wants to have
the world: vous ète sur, car on ma dit que devant une généralité on méttais rien.
tous ce qu'il y a en vert c'est que j'ai corriger
In this story , there are two persons , Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is rather middle aged. The story takes place in front of Deana's house. Deana lives in autarky in the forest and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she doesn't want to have the world news . She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went in her house because he brought food, the post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV and she doesn't listen to the radio. They speak of books, TV, the radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
ok donc j'ai remplacer bit par forest, j'ai enlever le s a want dans she doesn't want et j'ai remplacer the world
la c'est bon?
merci commème
In this story , there are two persons , Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is middle aged. The story takes place in front of Deana's house. Deana lives in autarky in the forest and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she doesn't want to have the world news . She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went to her house for bring food, post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV and she doesn't listen to the radio. They speak of books, TV, the radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
c'est mieu?
charlie53 a écrit :In this story , there are two persons , Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is middle aged. The story takes place in front of Deana's house. Deana lives in autarky in the forest and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she doesn't want to have the world news . She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went to her house for (1) bring food, ____ (2) post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV and she doesn't listen to the radio. They speak of books, TV, the radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
(1)
Tu avais mis "because", mais je ne comprenais pas le sens. Il viens chez elle parce qu'il apporte de la nourriture, etc ? Ce ne me semble pas être très logique…
(2) N'oublie pas l'article !
et vien cher chez elle pour lui apporter..
et ces a post? ou the post?
Traduction de pour:
1- Devant un nom / pronom
J'ai une surprise pour toi
= I have a treat for you
2- Devant un verbe
Pour être sincère
= To be honest, …
" a post " me semble plus légitime, vu la construction de ta phrase.
In this story , there are two persons , Jerry, a man and Deana, a woman. Jerry is rather old and Deana is middle aged. The story takes place in front of Deana's house. Deana lives in autarky in the forest and she likes this. She hasn't got a TV set, and she doesn't want to have the world news . She likes watching birds and she likes reading. Jerry went to her house to bring food, a post and a bottle of gaz. He is surprised because Deana hasn't got TV and she doesn't listen to the radio. They speak of books, TV, the radio, news of the world and the death. And the woman wants the man to bring many books.
ok
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