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Oral d’anglais sur la notion "mythes et héros"

Bonsoir

Melle de Saint Exupéry

J'ai été très prise et je n'ai pu te répondre : dis moi si un corrigé te serait toujours utile .

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Bonjour,
J'ai rédigé la notion myths and heroes pour l'oral d'anglais, et j'aurais besoin d'aide pour des corrections ou même des remarques.
Je vous remercie d'avance, pour votre aide


       I’m going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. To begin with, I’d like to give a definition of this notion. A myth can be a story about supernatural beings, like gods, heroes or about imaginary actions. But it can also represent the perfect human being, be a popular belief, a tradition or a fake notion.
Secondly, a hero is someone who stands out for his actions. Moreover, a hero can be defined by his courage, or he can be the main character of a story.
In relation to the notion, the subject of my presentation will be about the concept of the American Dream.
We may answer the question is the American Dream a myth or a reality ?
First of all, I will concentrate on the definition of the American Dream, then I will analyze the difficulty to achieve it, before finally focusing on the people who embody it.

      First of all, I will say that the American Dream is characterized by the belief that everyone in the United States of America has the chance to be successful and happy if people work hard. So, It lets think that anyone can achieve the American Dream, no matter where they were born or what class they were born into. That’s why, foreigners came to the United States of America, to begin a new and a better life, to scratch from nothing, to climb up the social ladder.
The song I chose, American Land interpreted by Bruce Springsteen is about the waves of immigration and how the immigrants imagine America, their expectations, and how America really is. The artist wants to draw our attention on the vision that the majority of immigrants had of the country. It is an interesting document insofar as America is described as a nation of immigrants, and a land of opportunity. Moreover, the singer pays tribute to the immigrants and to the working class who built the country.

       Secondly, we’re going to see the difficulty to achieve the American Dream. Indeed, a lot of people came to the USA, because they left their country where they couldn’t live properly, they lived in dire straits. Indeed, the document I took, is about the reasons for emigrating in the 19th century. It is an apt document insofar as it makes us realize all what can happen in a country. Actually, there were people who left their country because the USA offered higher pay, or because they couldn’t eat their fill, or there was no work nor money. These people left everything behind to have a chance to achieve the American Dream.
Unfortunately, they didn’t achieve the American Dream, for instance, the immigrants who came through Ellis Island, besides the poor conditions on board the ships, the inspections they had to have once they had arrived to Ellis Island, and the risk to be deported, couldn’t realize it. The idea of a population who was on an equal footing, where you could have success is a myth for the majority of the people. Indeed, the immigrants worked until they died, they dedicated their lives to build the country. Finally, they did everything to give a better income to their children, but their American Dream stayed a dream.

        Eventually, fortunately some people could achieve the American Dream. They could show that the American Dream could be a reality for a few people. Indeed, we studied a few documents which are about some people who embody the American Dream. It allows to draw our attention on the fact that a dream can be realized. In addition, they are interesting documents insofar as it gives us the desire to continue to dream what it’s very important to face life.
So, for instance, we studied Albert Einstein who was born in Germany in 1879 and who emigrated in 1933 to escape the Nazis, because he was Jewish. He achieved the American Dream while creating the Atomic Bomb. However, he had already achieved many important things before coming an American citizen.
Furthermore, we saw that Andrew Carnegie also realized the American Dream. He was born in Scotland in 1835, he emigrated in 1848, for a better life, and because he couldn’t make ends meet, his father’s firm crashed. He finally achieved the American Dream, because he founded the Carnegie Steel company and became the richest man in the world.
These two people illustrate very well the American Dream, they give us hope, they allow to make us see it as a reality.

      To conclude, I would like to say that to me, the American Dream is the idea that everyone on earth can have success, can climb up the social ladder and can start a new life. So, we saw that it could be a myth or a reality. Today, the USA remain an attractive country, many people dream of visiting the country to discover the culture, the food, or achieve the American Dream. But, even if it seems impossible to realize it, we have to keep dreaming.

Merci pour votre aide

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bonjour , je passe à l’oral pour le bac en anglais
On a étudié la notion de myth and heroes
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Oral d’anglais sur la notion "mythes et héros"

bonjour, j'ai fait mon oral d'anglais  pour le bac sur la notion mythes et héros mais je pense avoir fait des fautes. Quelqu'un pourrait-il me le corriger ?
Votre aide me serait précieuse!
Merci d'avance.

    Today, I am going to about the notion myths and heroes.
Who has never dreamt of starting from scratch, raising to fame and becoming a successful singer or althlete ?
So poses the question, how did the selfmade-man and women make it to the top ?

    When we see the successful people, we think they're lucky but we 're only looking at what happened to them instead of wondering how they got there. What were their sacrifices and determination ? For instance, the fastest man in the world, Usain Bolt who's known for his amzing physical ambilities. Und yet, it wasn't so easy to dedicated so much time to his sport und  always setting an example. That's a role model for kids.
    Moreover, it seems to be positive to have aspirations and high hopes when you want make a go of something. In the movie  « Invincible », based on the true story of Vince  Papale, a man whose dream was to become a professional footballplayer und which come true. Although, he grew up in a poor area of Philadelphia and even if people warm him about the risks, he never give up. As confident in his talent as hard worker, he overcomes the obstacles he could have met. It shows that if you persevere and stay straight you must fulfill your dream.
    No matter the harassment we endured, we can succeed.For example, Oprah Winfrey, a TV host presenter, who was born in a rather poor family during the segregation's period, has managed the turn her suffering and vulnerabilities in strength. Her life wasn't a bed of roses but she has always felt that she was born for greatness. She 's ambitious and advanturous besides raisind the divisive subjects like AIDS or sexual abuse. She has an influence because she is listened and respected. She's also known to be a philanthropist with her $ 40 million donated to charities every year, for created a fondation and so far and so forth.

    For all this reasons, we must be confident in our potential, working hard and see the bright rather than the seamy sides. Even though, it seems actually tobe more complicated to make your dreams come true and many end up broken hearted. To my mind, the one who never try his luck, will remain more bitter than the other who failed.

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Oral d’anglais sur la notion "mythes et héros"

Bonjour, je vais passer mon épreuve d'anglais du bac scientifique vendredi prochain, pourriez vous me donner votre avis sur ma notion ?

I’m going to talk about the notion myths and hereos. To begin with, I’d like to give a definition of the notion : a myth can be defined as a tale or a legend, a story about gods or hereos, a popular belief of a common tale, or a fake story to transmit human values or influence people. A hero can be admired for his courage, his outstanding achievements and noble qualities. He can be unreal like a god or semi-god who achieves a feat. He fights against evils and defends moral values.
To illustrate this notion, I have chosen to examine the American Conquest including the myth of manifest destiny and the heroes who reached space.
How the American Conquest is characteristic of the notions of myths and heroes ? To answer this question I will use 5 documents : American Progress, a painting of John Gast, an extract of The Eagle has Landed : The story of Apollo wrote by Jeffrey Smith, the speech delivered by John Kennedy on the 15th july of 1960, an excerpt of a conversation between Neil Armstrong, Buzz Aldrin and Richard Nixon and a extract of Barack Obama’s speech after Neil Armstrong’s death.

The conquest of the west

American Progress is a painting of John Gast. In the middle, we can see a figure who is flying. She looks like an angel and she is holding an electric wire that symbolizes the advance of the trains and a book stand for education. Behind her, the colours are light even though in front of her, the painting is dark : the woman bright light and embody American progress and civilization. The painting represent the west expansion thanks to differents means of transportation : horses, stagecoach, trains and telegraph.
It gives a good image to this conquest, and corresponds to the ideology of the manifest destiny. This is the belief that the United States were destined to expand across North America. There are three basic themes to manifest destiny:
The special virtues of the American people and their institutions
The mission of the United States to redeem and remake the west in the image of agrarian America
An irresistible destiny to accomplish this essential duty

The conquest of space

The 21 july of 1969, Neil Armstrong is the first man to walk on the moon. He was one of the three men which was part of the mission Apollo 11 who leave the earth the 16 july of the same year. It was a very special day so Neil Armstrong, Michael Collins and Buzz Aldrin had a specific schedule on that early morning as each action had been planned carefully :
-They went through a final physical examination.
-Then, they had one last meeting with the Director of Fling Crew Operations.
-During the breakfast, they were sketched to immortalize this very important day.
-They walked into the suit room in order to don their spacesuit after medical leads had been attached to their torsos and limbs. Once their helmet were in with visors snapped shut, they were ready.
-At 5:30 am, they left the Kennedy Center for Manned Spacecraft Operations, to get on a van and reach the launch pad. While they were walking to the van, they waved at the reporters.
Moreover, the world viewed them like courageous explorers and the Americans considered them like models, heroes.

The point of vue of politicians

During his speech in 1960, John Kennedy, member of democratic party and candidate to Presidential elections of the USA, talk about new frontier. “ The frontier of the 1960’s, the frontier of unknown opportunities and perils, the frontier of unfilled hopes and unfilled threats. Kennedy wants to mobilize his fellow citizen overcome the widest challenges. He has also paid tribute to all the pioneers “the pioneers gave up their safety, their comfort and sometimes their lives to build our new West”. He maintain the myth of Manifest Destiny.
Richard Nixon has congratulated to Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin for their feat to walk on the moon by phonecall : “I just can't tell you how proud we all are of what you've done. For every American, this has to be the proudest day of our lives. And for people all over the world, I am sure they too join with Americans in recognizing what an immense feat this is.”
Barack Obama has paid homage to Neil Armstrong after his death : “Neil was among the greatest of American heroes — not just of his time, but of all time.”
We can conclude that the myth of Manifest Destiny and the heroes of the space’s conquest are two topics very important for politicians.

In conclusion, we have see that the notion of myth in USA is represented by the Manifest Destiny, which is the belief that the United States were destined to expand across North America. The notion of heroes is emboded by the space’s conquest but also by the expansion across the west. They are two themes very important for the us, that why the politicians talk about that .

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Bonsoir Bluevox

J'ai corrigé des erreurs (voc-temps...)Puis ajouté des conseils.

I’m going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. To begin with, I’d like to give a definition of these notions : a myth can be defined as a tale or a legend, a story about gods or hereos, a popular belief of a common tale, or a fake (I'm not sure this is appropriate) story to transmit human values or influence people. A hero can be admired for his courage, his outstanding achievements and noble qualities. He can be unreal like a god or semi-god who achieves  feats. He fights against evil and defends moral values.
To illustrate this notion, I have chosen to examine the American Conquest including the myth of manifest destiny and the heroes who reached space.

(Manifest Destiny est apparue très tôt pour justifier de l'expansion territoriale tandis que The Conquest of Space /Space Conquest est un défi "aérien" qui s'inscrit dans la Guerre froide) Il faut le faire apparaître me semble t-il.
How far is the American Conquest revealing of the notion  of myths and heroes ? To answer this question I will use 5(Five, really??) documents : American Progress, a painting of John Gast, an extract of The Eagle has landed : The story of Apollo wrote by Jeffrey Smith, the speech delivered by John Kennedy on  July 15 th 1960, an excerpt of a conversation between Neil Armstrong, Buzz Aldrin and Richard Nixon and a extract of Barack Obama’s speech after Neil Armstrong’s death.
The conquest of the west
American Progress is a painting by John Gast. In the middle, we can see a female figure who is flying. She looks like an angel and she is holding an electric wire that symbolizes the advance of the trains and a book that stands for education. Behind her, the colours are light even though in front of her, the painting is dark : the woman bright light and embodies American progress and civilization. The painting represents the western expansion thanks to differents means of transportation : horses, stagecoach, trains and telegraph.
It gives a good image to this conquest, and corresponds to the ideology of the manifest destiny : the belief that the United States were destined to expand towards the West. There are three basic themes to manifest destiny:
The special virtues of the American people and their institutionsb(??)
The mission of the United States to redeem and make the west in the image of agrarian America(??)
An irresistible destiny to accomplish this essential duty(??)
(indispensable? Pour moi, trop long et vague :soyez concret et simplifiez , il faut de plus gardez des idées sous le coude pour l'échange avec votre examinateur)De plus :vous présentez le point de vue US : sachez être critique vis à vis de cette notion qui a justifié l'extermination des Indiens d'Amérique (connaissez vous le poème déchirant White Man Come?)
The conquest of space
On the  21st of  July  1969, Neil Armstrong was the first man to walk on the moon. He was one of the three men who were part of the mission Apollo 11( which left the earth the 16 july of the same year.) It was a very special day so Neil Armstrong, Michael Collins and Buzz Aldrin had a specific schedule on that early morning as each action had been planned carefully :
-They went through a final physical examination.
-Then, they had one last meeting with the Director of Fling Crew Operations.
-During the breakfast, they were sketched to immortalize this very important day.
-They walked into the suit room in order to don their spacesuit after medical leads had been attached to their torsos and limbs. Once their helmets were in with visors snapped shut, they were ready. (once again why go through all this routine, What is the point you want to make ? Tough mission/ Dangerous/ Carefully prepared)
-At 5:30 am, they left the Kennedy Center for Manned Spacecraft Operations, to get on a van and reach the launch pad. While they were walking to the van, they waved at the reporters.
Moreover,(?) no: Therefore ,the world viewed them like courageous explorers and the Americans considered them like role models, modern heroes.
The point of vue(view) of politicians: cas possessif?
During his speech in 1960, John Kennedy, member of democratic party and candidate to Presidential elections of the USA, talked about new frontier. “ The frontier of the 1960’s, the frontier of unknown opportunities and perils, the frontier of unfilled hopes and unfilled threats. Kennedy wants to mobilize his fellow citizens to overcome  challenges. He has also paid tribute to all the pioneers “the pioneers gave up their safety, their comfort and sometimes their lives to build our new West”. He recalls the myth of Manifest Destiny.
Richard Nixon congratulated  Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin for their feat by calling them : “I just can't tell you how proud we all are of what you've done. For every American, this has to be the proudest day of our lives. And for people all over the world(voilà qui est intéressant!), I am sure they too join with Americans in recognizing what an immense feat this is.”(ce qui veut dire en sous texte : les USA sont les meilleurs )
Barack Obama paid tribute to Neil Armstrong after his death : “Neil was among the greatest of American heroes — not just of his time, but of all time.”
We can conclude that the myth of Manifest Destiny and the heroes of the space conquest are two topics very important (!)for US  politicians. (transition bancale et sans doute inutile)

In conclusion, we have seen that the notion of myth in the USA is represented by the  myth of Manifest Destiny, which is the belief that the United States were destined to expand across North America.(répétition:be careful !) The notion of heroes is embodied by the space conquest but also by the expansion across the west.(no the "heroes are people -fictional or not) Here you are dealing with myths still, ok ? They are two themes very important(!)for the US, that why  politicians talk about that .(J'enlèverais ceci)

La conclusion n'est pas une reprise des idées exposées : tentez d'ouvrir sur un sujet plus général (exemple : The Usa = feeling that expansion on earth and in space is fine for them / The USA = the leaders of the world…-be careful and remain critical)

If you know enough about it :hint that this expansion or feeling of power has  justified (and still does) political intervention in domestic affairs of other countries)
Conseils
attention aux "s" (present) et au prétérit
relisez vous et vérifierez la durée de votre temps de parole   : l'ensemble me parait trop long (et encore une fois trop chargé de détails)
5 textes ou images ou propos pour cette notion: à vérifier

Vous parlez du premier alunissage :peut-être serait-il judicieux de mettre en avant "one small step for mankind, a huge leap for humanity "
Trouver des synonymes à "important" "good"

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Merci Fidji45 pour votre réponse. Je vais reprendre ça et si vous êtes d'accord je vous enverrais la version corrigée. Passant également des épreuves de sélection pour rentrer en Iut de journalisme et communication, tout s'enchaîne pour moi. Je vais essayer de m'en occuper mercredi.
Merci encore

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Oral d’anglais sur la notion "mythes et héros"

Je vous en prie!


Rendez vous la tâche plus facile en allégeant certaines parties . Vous gardez ainsi des arguments pour l'échange avec votre prof.

Passez peut-être à une autre notion car celle -ci , une fois quelques points enlevés est bien ! Ah je viens de voir que vous avez rédigé d'autres notions . Parfait . J'essaierai d'en corriger une cette semaine !

Good luck on your upcoming tests!

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Encore merci !

Oral d’anglais sur la notion "mythes et héros"

Bonjour, je suis élève de Terminale S et je prépare une notion pour un oral d'anglais sur "Myth and Heroes" et j'aurais besoin d'aide pour une problématique. (Le Blitz (1940) étudié en classe)
Voici le début:

I'm going to talk about the notion "myth and heroes". To start with, i'd like to begin by giving a definition of this notion. A myth can be defined as a traditionnal story related to a country's culture and history. Moreover a hero is a person or a ficitonal person who is admired for his qualities or achievments. I decided to focus on "the myth of the blitz", the Blitz is a major event that occured during the World War II in 1940, its big impact on British society gave him a particular position in British history. We can wonder...

Et j'hésite entre:
We can wonder in what extent the myth of the blitz can change the way to see this event.
Why does the myth of the Blitz was created?
What was the role of the myth in creating a memory of this event?

Je ne sais pas laquelle choisir et auquel cas quel plan faire.
Je vous remercie d'avance pour l'aide que vous voudriez bien m'apporter.